大学英语作文4000字：成熟不成熟
acceptance of mature immaturity
"children over 15 should be allowed to make decisions about their lives without the interference of their parents or teachers. society should accept that children mature at a younger age and should adjust the law accordingly."
the fact that we are not able to determine the eact moment at which maturity is realized due to the gradual changing nature of the growing process does not prevent us from establishing a practicable criterion by using the concept of a legal age, and placing on it an ecessive amount of reliance as if it were a creed.objectively, since the interpretation of maturity merely bears a local, temporary meaning (e. g. , it is understood distinctly in different cultures), not to mention the diversity of particular individuals, clearly an age criterion is definable only in the sense of statistics, yielding an average result of which the legislation should be adjusted to. however, no evidence indicates the invariance of the statistical result under the vicissitudes of the times.
persisting in an a priori assumption may not be as highly laudable and dependable as believing in an empirical conclusion.while, both facts and analyses, verifying uniformly the time-dependency of the statistical mature age, suggests the shift to a younger age of children＇s maturity.
in reality, phenomena serving as foundations of the above statement are enormous, such as the manifest superiority of the young in knowledge structure and quantity to their elder generation for a corresponding age, their highly developed intelligence and advanced ability in comprehension and their sophisticated behavior in schools and their communities. neither could all related evidence be listed, nor should it be ignored. even with a phcnomenological attitude, one is bound to perceive the indispensability of a change to the old rule to meet the requirement of the new situation.
analyses yield an identical verdict. a brief investigation of new situation.
analyses yield an identical verdict. a brief investigation of the environment in which the new generation has been brought up is sufficient to justify all the observed phenomena. physiologically, unimaginable revolutions in food supply and nutritional structure took place globally after the 2nd world war, which,together with other developments concerning living conditions,guarantee the necessary materialbases.psychologically,the young, confronted with a world of information and education,are entitled to nearly the same rights and freedom as the adults in front of the television or other mass media. they know everything. they understand everything.
the determination of the mature age is based on scientific principles rather than on doctrines. if the young, indeed, possess judgments by no means inferior to that of the generally acknowledged adults, others should treat them as adults, allowing them to make decisions independently.moreover, there is no difficulty in the law, which is not the truth of the universe, but a sheer compromise of social forces, and have undergone innumerable historical modifications and revolutions with a potential
transformation today.
though the precise new legal mature age is only attainable through statistics,theobvious tendency implies an absolute modification. with an unknown date of realization, it is epected that teachers and parents should discard the traditional ideas and really treat the young equally when the time comes.
简评
阅读这份作文时，我的第一印象是，一名大三的学生拥有如此庞大的词汇量实属不易。他在行文中甚至使用了拉丁文的词汇，这在大学生的作文中是非常罕见的。作者对写作的文体和修辞也具有较深的了解，大量使用了被动句式和名词化结构，其词汇的使用和文体风格配合得非常默契。极其庄重的文体不像是一篇大学生作文，而像是一篇极其严肃的哲学研究论文。
作者行文的切入角度新颖而有力，从生理学的角度去论述法理，具有较强的说服力，也反映了作者不凡的见识和思维能力。作者在标题中大胆地使用了矛盾修辞法(oymoron)，耐人寻味。这些都说明作者具有深厚的语言功底，并花了功夫进行认真的思考。
当然，本文也存在着一些美中不足。词汇量大本来是好事，但也要善于在写作中驾驭词汇，锤炼自己的语言。“文以载道”，作文的形式应当为内容服务，过于注重形式也许会过犹不及。本文的风格极其庄重，辞藻华丽，可谓pompous，但多少给人一种冗长重复的感觉，有的结构很长，其实完全可以用两三个词来表达出来。反观西方当代作家的散文，却常常使用y。u来和读者对话，很少使用被动语态。句式长短交错，行文亲切自然。“删繁就简三秋树，标新立异二月花”，才是作文的最高境界。
