高中英语作文字:例证说明:永恒的美-Eternal Beauty
永恒的美
【内容提示】
美,人人都爱。当我们来到一个名胜景点,看到蔚蓝色的天空、葱绿的青山、清凌凌的水时,我们说这是一种美;我们读到一首新颖的诗歌,一篇优美的散文或奇妙的文章时,也会赞叹这是一种美。美,处处皆是,但是,我们最崇敬的是心灵美和人品的美。请你写一篇文章,用一个具体事例说明这种美。
【作文示范】
eternal beauty
when you get to a scenic spot and see the blue sky, the green mountain and clear water, maybe you will say this is beauty. when you read a fresh poem, graceful prose① or a wonderful article, perhaps you will sag that is beauty…. beauty eists everywhere and everyone likes beauty. this story is about beauty of another kind----that of an ordinary woman, yao inin.
once, my grandmother was on a bus. suddenly she felt sick and wanted to throw up②,but she was afraid to make the bus dirty. the moment ms yao saw this, she handed her own clean mug③ to my grandma and said,“don't worry, granny. you can use this mug. ”grandma was very grateful, but she was so weak that she suddenly fell down in a faint④.without delay ms yao asked the driver to drive the bus over to a hospital nearby. after an eamination,the doctor told ms yao that my grandma must stay in hospital for a day or two. ms yao paid the fee⑤ for my grandma and sat by the bed for a day.
in the meantime⑥, my family were searching everywhere for grandma. how we wished we could see dear grandma again. just when we were much worried, the net day grandma appeared before us supported by a stranger. as you can guess, it was ms yao. we were wondering about this when grandma said,“without the kind conductor, i might not have been able to see you any more.” we thanked ms yao again and again, tears in our eyes.
(选自1987年9月15日《上海学生英文报》)
【词语解释】
①graceful['greisful] prose[pr+uz] 优美的散文
②throw up 呕吐
③mug[m)g] n.大杯
④faint[feint] n.昏厥 fall(down) in a faint昏倒
⑤fee[fi:] n.费
⑥meantime['mi:ntaim] n.其间
【写法指要】
本文引言段使用的是隐含篇题(implied thesis),即作者没有把篇题说出来,而是让读者自己通过阅读全文去归纳:这是一种心灵的美和人品的美。这一点我们可以通过作者使用的例证(illustration),即感人肺腑的真实故事体会出来。此外,作者在叙述文中的人物时也是用的含蓄手法:开始我们只知道好心人名叫yao yinin,并不知道她是干什么的,直到最后才通过 grandma 的话道出来,这就造成了一种人物身分的悬念,发人深省。